Is this too short?

I haunt through a deserted place,


Where lilac felt a lover’s grace.


I see a pine that snowflakes race,


Drip by names that took these ways.





Blooms as white the winter howl,


A kiss, I feel on my shivered soul.


A whisper heard, her warming rays,


“Walk my valley, these lonely days”

Is this too short?
lol no. poems are never too short. just look at tankas and haikus lol. yeah i liked it but some words look mispelled. just to let you know. but to get on track good job! i had to tell my sister about it and she liked it too!
Reply:The problem with these kinds of poems is that the rhyming can't help but be forced. This is only natural. I can sense that you are a creative person who could probably hammer out many wonderful poems. Just not in constrictive style.





As for this poem it is not too short. Lines 3 and 4 hurt my brain and eyes to read. The second stanza is a little cheesy, well.





Edit: Assuming I am the one you are asking I will say I did not like this particular poem. The first half of the first stanza starts it out strong, then it kind of falls apart.
Reply:If you feel that it is complete, then it's not too short. It's your poetry. You make it how you love it.





P.S. I like it.
Reply:Poems are expressions of the heart. If your expression is expressed the poem is finished.
Reply:Not at all, I think this is a great poem.


Its quality not quantity!!


The words are very effective and I think thats all you need to touch the reader.
Reply:no
Reply:good ryhmes, yo! What da beat like?
Reply:not at all! if you got a message out that's all you need. i actually know a poet that wrote a single sentance on a page that wasn't really poetry-like, but the aftermath of it was as poetical... something really nice. %26gt;=P


plus, there's no need to complicate things. i myself have a poem that's exactly the same length - it has 2 stanzas by 4 lines each and i can't imagine lenghtening it.



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